Over the mountains she rolls.
Weaving through the trees,
whispering something to them.
A murmur of russell,
you hear in reply
Down among the grass
she tells her tale.
Then upwards flying,
towards the heavens,
to glide among the clouds
What she tells them
I'm not sure,
but the effect
is plain to see
2 comments:
The critics are saying:
"Your best yet!"
"Bravo!"
"Does it have a title?"
I really like it, sister. You did a good job.
Great use of personification. Well done.
-The Writers Guild
elegant. This is a good example of modern verse (something I'm trying to learn these days). Thanks for teaching me by example.
I like that the trees reply. We often read about the wind whispering in the trees, but the trees never reply. It's a beautiful natural communion between the two. I like it!
How about some more poems? I like your poems.
A echo the question from the your brother's comment: "does it have a title?" You should name it. But the title shouldn't be obvious. It should be a title that sort of informs the poem a little bit. Yeah... I like that.
Wondrous words! Keep it up.
Yours,
GS
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